Elsie+Locke+2011

My next step in writing is to create a picture for the reader I will achieve this by adding description and elaborating on my ideas e.g "Lung picked them up by the scruff of the neck and chucked them in the stinking rubbish bin". Date achieved: //Mrs Stock// Theme: being a hero
 * MY LEARNING TARGETS**

__Monday 13 June__

Characters : main characters Bob, Small parts: Billy ( friend ) lang/lung ( evil dude ) adam ( life changer person ) but-nut and nut-but ( 2 people who cloned them selves now there are hundreds of them), james ( person needs help )

faces fear / saves person / big battle / good days at school from then on.

__**A Hero In Bob**__

One day Bob woke up like it was a normal day but it turned out to be the weirdest day of his life. Bob was a small boy very shy and very scared. He did his usual routine for getting ready for school. Then Bob said “another day at school of miserable day at school.” Off he went on to the bus to school.

When he got to school he met his one friend Billy came up to him and said “hello.” Then the troubled started. This guy at school called lung was the biggest bully in the school. Lung cam up to Bob and gave him some much grief how he was so dumb and weak. Then Lung piked Bob and Bill and chucked them in a rubbish bin. They were in there for about an hour. Suddenly someone came and took them out of the rubbish bin. When the kids sore someone really weird and he said “I am here to change your life”.

The boys just stood there freaked out. But the man was only there for Bob. So he took Bob away into his car and just drove off leaving Bill there. In the car Bob kept asking questions but all he said was “ all will be reviled in a mater of time. After about an hour the strange guy said “when you get to the gate tell them that Adam Pinky sent you and they will let you start your journey. So Bob hoped out sacred out of his whits but had enough gut to go to the gate. The person at the gate asked him “ Who sent you ?” and Bob replied to him Adam Pinky sent me. As soon as he finished the gates opened and the person at the gate said “ good luck you have now started your journey”.

Bob walked on in then he stood on an envelope. He picked it up and opened it to read what it said. It said “ Welcome to this land make it to the end and your life will be changed, play it right and you will be finished good luck”. Bob walked on the he found some weapons and armor. He picked them up and carried on.

When he was a little further he sore some people hiding in some bushes. Then all of a sudden they jumped out to attack him. Bob was frightened. Seen as he was a wimp he tried to escape but then it happened. The boss of them all came out and hit him to the ground. Next thing he knows he is in a cage tied up. Bob tried to scream, braking the rope, yelling, seeing is any one was there and then he just lied down and stayed.Hoping he would be let out. After about 1 hour of just sitting there the big boss came in and started teasing him. Bob asked what his name was and he said “Lang so if you don’t mind i’ll do the questions” in a really mean and nasty kind of voice. When all the questions was over Bob had given him information about anything and every thing. They finally let him go but Lang told “ You better never show your face again now Scram!!” Bob ran and ran until his legs just stopped. Bob was crying and saying“I just want to go home” .As soon as as he finished his sentence Adam came back. And he offered him a way home. But he also managed how this will change his life. Bob then said “ yes I will give up this is to terrible. As he was walking back to the car Bob was about to get in when something inside him told him not to. Then Bob said to Adam “ do you know what I think your right I should keep going, then he ran off into the darkness to finish what he started.

As he was going through the forest he felt a bit more brave but not enough to stand up to people. As he was going through he heard a faint “help help”. As he kept walking he heard it again but louder “ help help” then he sore it or should I say him. There was a boy surrounded by clone, two different types of clones. Then he looked on his back and saw there names one was Called But Nut and Nut Bill. Bob new what he had to do. He had to save this person! First he needed a plan. Bob was scared but he new this is what Adam was talking about. So Bob saw a vine hanging out of a tree. So Bob ran up and jumped to grab it.

He was almost there but then one the clones grabbed him and put him in the circle with this other guy. Bob was freaking out wanting to quit and leave but he new that he had to do something. Bob jumped at one of But nuts clone and pushed him over. All the clone went to go do a dog pile when the guy that was stuck grabbed him and pulled out the way. When all the clones had dropped to the ground Bob and his friend stared to beat them up. Once all the clones had been done Bob said “ I have done I have really done” and so the kept going. As Bob was walking with this person he decided to ask his name and “ what is your name” and he replied “James, James is my name”. So Bob and James walked on till they came to a big house with signs all around it say “KEEP OUT!!!” but the two boys new this was the big bosses house so they went in.

When they opened the door and both the boys saw that Lang was standing right there to greet them. Bob and James was running around trying to get away from him. Then Bob said “we have to fight him” “are you crazy” James said. But it was to late Bob had already gone to fight him so with a huff James followed him. Bob tried grabbing a pole and waking him but Lang always dodged it. So James try punching him. He got one shot at him but the Lang hit him. Lang was just about to kill the two boys but Bob jumped up and knocked him out.

The boys just stood there and behind Lang was Adam to congratulate them. And Adam said “good job guys you have completed what you have started good luck in life” and then he just disappeared and Bob got picked up by a helicopter and never saw James again. Bob new he could not tell anybody about this because no one would believe him.

The next day Bob woke up and said to himself “today will be different” and he walked off to school knowing he was going to survive mentally and physically. He got to school and then he saw they had a test. Bob said “I may be stronger but I was not prepared for this”

__**The End**__

__**Start Again**__

One day Bob woke up thinking it was a normal day but for all he new it was the wierdest day of his life

Theme: being a hero

__Monday 30 May__

Characters : main characters Bob, Small parts: Billy ( friend ) lang/lung ( evil dude ) adam ( life changer person ) but-nut and nut-but ( 2 people who cloned them selves now there are hundreds of them), james ( person needs help )

faces fear / saves person / big battle / good days at school from then on.

__**A Hero In Bob**__

One day Bob woke up like it was a normal day but it turned out to be the weirdest day of his life. Bob was a small boy very shy and very scared. He did his usual routine for getting ready for school. Then Bob said “another day at school of miserable day at school.” Off he went on to the bus to school.

When he got to school he met his one friend Billy came up to him and said “hello.” Then the troubled started. This guy at school called lung was the biggest bully in the school. Lung cam up to Bob and gave him some much grief how he was so dumb and weak. Then Lung piked Bob and Bill and chucked them in a rubbish bin. They were in there for about an hour. Suddenly someone came and took them out of the rubbish bin. When the kids sore someone really weird and he said “I am here to change your life”.

The boys just stood there freaked out. But the man was only there for Bob. So he took Bob away into his car and just drove off leaving Bill there. In the car Bob kept asking questions but all he said was “ all will be reviled in a mater of time. After about an hour the strange guy said “when you get to the gate tell them that Adam Pinky sent you and they will let you start your journey. So Bob hoped out sacred out of his whits but had enough gut to go to the gate. The person at the gate asked him “ Who sent you ?” and Bob replied to him Adam Pinky sent me. As soon as he finished the gates opened and the person at the gate said “ good luck you have now started your journey”.

Bob walked on in then he stood on an envelope. He picked it up and opened it to read what it said. It said “ Welcome to this land make it to the end and your life will be changed, play it right and you will be finished good luck”. Bob walked on the he found some weapons and armor. He picked them up and carried on.

When he was a little further he sore some people hiding in some bushes. Then all of a sudden they jumped out to attack him. Bob was frightened. Seen as he was a wimp he tried to escape but then it happened. The boss of them all came out and hit him to the ground. Next thing he knows he is in a cage tied up. Bob tried to scream, braking the rope, yelling, seeing is any one was there and then he just lied down and stayed.Hoping he would be let out. After about 1 hour of just sitting there the big boss came in and started teasing him. Bob asked what his name was and he said “Lang so if you don’t mind i’ll do the questions” in a really mean and nasty kind of voice. When all the questions was over Bob had given him information about anything and every thing. They finally let him go but Lang told “ You better never show your face again now Scram!!” Bob ran and ran until his legs just stopped. Bob was crying and saying“I just want to go home” .As soon as as he finished his sentence Adam came back. And he offered him a way home. But he also managed how this will change his life. Bob then said “ yes I will give up this is to terrible. As he was walking back to the car Bob was about to get in when something inside him told him not to. Then Bob said to Adam “ do you know what I think your right I should keep going, then he ran off into the darkness to finish what he started.

As he was going through the forest he felt a bit more brave but not enough to stand up to people. As he was going through he heard a faint “help help”. As he kept walking he heard it again but louder “ help help” then he sore it or should I say him. There was a boy surrounded by clone, two different types of clones. Then he looked on his back and saw there names one was Called But Nut and Nut Bill. Bob new what he had to do. He had to save this person! First he needed a plan. Bob was scared but he new this is what Adam was talking about. So Bob saw a vine hanging out of a tree. So Bob ran up and jumped to grab it.

He was almost there but then one the clones grabbed him and put him in the circle with this other guy. Bob was freaking out wanting to quit and leave but he new that he had to do something. Bob jumped at one of But nuts clone and pushed him over. All the clone went to go do a dog pile when the guy that was stuck grabbed him and pulled out the way. When all the clones had dropped to the ground Bob and his friend stared to beat them up. Once all the clones had been done Bob said “ I have done I have really done” and so the kept going. As Bob was walking with this person he decided to ask his name and “ what is your name” and he replied “James, James is my name”. So Bob and James walked on till they came to a big house with signs all around it say “KEEP OUT!!!” but the two boys new this was the big bosses house so they went in.

When they opened the door and both the boys saw that Lang was standing right there to greet them. Bob and James was running around trying to get away from him. Then Bob said “we have to fight him” “are you crazy” James said. But it was to late Bob had already gone to fight him so with a huff James followed him. Bob tried grabbing a pole and waking him but Lang always dodged it. So James try punching him. He got one shot at him but the Lang hit him. Lang was just about to kill the two boys but Bob jumped up and knocked him out.

The boys just stood there and behind Lang was Adam to congratulate them. And Adam said “good job guys you have completed what you have started good luck in life” and then he just disappeared and Bob got picked up by a helicopter and never saw James again. Bob new he could not tell anybody about this because no one would believe him.

The next day Bob woke up and said to himself “today will be different” and he walked off to school knowing he was going to survive mentally and physically. He got to school and then he saw they had a test. Bob said “I may be stronger but I was not prepared for this”

__**The End**__

Theme: being a hero

__Monday 23 May__

Characters : main characters Bob, Small parts: Billy ( friend ) lang/lung ( evil dude ) adam ( life changer person ) but-nut and nut-but ( 2 people who cloned them selves now there are hundreds of them), james ( person needs help )

faces fear / saves person / big battle / good days at school from then on.

__**A Hero In Bob**__

One day Bob woke up like it was a normal day but it turned out to be the weirdest day of his life. Bob was a small boy very shy and very scared. He did his usual routine for getting ready for school. Then Bob said “ another day at school of miserable day at school”. Off he went on to the bus to school.

When he got to school he met his one friend Billy came up to him and said hello. Then the troubled started. This guy at school called lung was the biggest bully in the school. Lung cam up to Bob and gave him some much grief how he was so dumb and weak. Then Lung piked Bob and Bill and chucked them in a rubbish bin. They were in there for about an hour or so when some came and took them out the rubbish bin. When the kids sore some one really weird and he said “I am here to change your life”.

The boys just stood there freaked out. But the man was only there for Bob. So he took Bob away into his car and just drove off leaving Bill there. In the car Bob kept asking questions but all he said was “ all will be reviled in a mater of time. After about an hour the strange guy said “when you get to the gate tell them that Adam Pinky sent you and they will let you start your journey. So Bob hoped out sacred out of his whits but had enough gut to go to the gate. The person at the gate asked him “ Who sent you ?” and Bob replied to him Adam Pinky sent me. As soon as he finished the gates opened and the person at the gate said “ good luck you have now started your journey”.

Bob walked on in then he stood on an envelope. He picked it up and opened it to read what it said. It said “ Welcome to this land make it to the end and your life will be changed play it right and you will finished good luck”. Bob walked on the he found some weapons and armor and some weapons. He picked them up and carried on.

When he was a little further he sore some people hiding in some bushes. Then all of a sudden they jumped out to attack him. Bob was frightened. Seen as he was a wimp he tried to escape but then it happened. The boss of them all came out and hit him to the ground. Next thing he knows he is in a cage tied up. Bob try scream, braking the rope, yelling, seeing is any one was there and then he just lied down and stayed put hoping he would be let out. After about 1 hr of just sitting there the big boss came in and started teasing him. Bob asked what his name was and he said “Lang so if you don’t mind i’ll do the questions” in a really mean and nasty kind of voice. When all the questions was over Bob had given him information about anything and every thing. They finally let him go but Lang told “ You better never show your face again now Scram!! ” Bob ran and ran until his legs just stopped. Bob was crying and saying“I just want to go home” .As soon as as he finished his sentence Adam came back. And he offered him a way home. But he also managed how this will change his life. Bob then said “ yes I will give up this is to terrible. As he was walking back to the car Bob was about to get in when something inside him told him not to. Then Bob said to Adam “ do you know what I think your right I should keep going, then he ran off into the darkness to finish what he started.

As he was going through the forest he felt a bit more brave but not enough to stand up to people. As he was going through he heard a faint “help help”. As he kept walking he heard it again but louder “ help help” then he sore it or should I say him. There was a boy surrounded by clone, two different types of clones. Then he looked on his back and saw there names one was Called But Nut and Nut Bill. Bob new what he had to do. He had to save this person! First he needed a plan. Bob was scared but he new this is what Adam was talking about. So Bob saw a vine hanging out of a tree. So Bob ran up and jumped to grab it.

He was almost there but then one the clones grabbed him and put him in the circle with this other guy. Bob was freaking out wanting to quit and leave but he new that he had to do something, and this what he did. Bob jumped at one of But nuts clone and pushed him over. All the clone went to go do a dog pile when the guy that was stuck grabbed him and pulled out the way. When all the clones had dropped to the ground Bob and his friend stared to beat them up. Once all the clones had been done for Bob said “ I have done I have really done” and so the kept going. As Bob was walking with this person he decided to ask his name and “ what is your name” and he replied “James, James is my name”. So Bob and James walked on till they came to a big house with signs all around it say “KEEP OUT!!!” but the two boys new this was the big bosses house so they went in.

When they opened the door and both the boys saw that Lang was standing right there to greet them.

Theme: being a hero __Friday 20 May__

Characters : main characters Bob, Small parts: Billy ( friend ) lang/lung ( evil dude ) adam ( life changer person ) but-nut and nut-but ( 2 people who cloned them selves now there are hundreds of them), james ( person needs help )

Start day / go to school / meet friend / picked on by lang / pick up by mysterious person / driven to Auckland / set on joinery / mets bad dudes / wimps out / find person stuck in a circle of clones / faces fear / saves person / big battle / good days at school from then on.

__**A Hero In Bob**__

One day Bob woke up like it was a normal day but it turned out to be the weirdest day of his life. Bob was a small boy very shy and very scared. He did his usual routine for getting ready for school. Then Bob said “ another day at school of miserable day at school”. Off he went on to the bus to school.

When he got to school he met his one friend Billy came up to him and said hello. Then the troubled started. This guy at school called lung was the biggest bully in the school. Lung cam up to Bob and gave him some much grief how he was so dumb and weak. Then Lung piked Bob and Bill and chucked them in a rubbish bin. They were in there for about an hour or so when some came and took them out the rubbish bin. When the kids sore some one really weird and he said “I am here to change your life”.

The boys just stood there freaked out. But the man was only there for Bob. So he took Bob away into his car and just drove off leaving Bill there. In the car Bob kept asking questions but all he said was “ all will be reviled in a mater of time. After about an hour the strange guy said “when you get to the gate tell them that Adam Pinky sent you and they will let you start your journey. So Bob hoped out sacred out of his whits but had enough gut to go to the gate. The person at the gate asked him “ Who sent you ?” and Bob replied to him Adam Pinky sent me. As soon as he finished the gates opened and the person at the gate said “ good luck you have now started your journey”.

Bob walked on in then he stood on an envelope. He picked it up and opened it to read what it said. It said “ Welcome to this land make it to the end and your life will be changed play it right and you will finished good luck”. Bob walked on the he found some weapons and armor and some weapons. He picked them up and carried on.

When he was a little further he sore some people hiding in some bushes. Then all of a sudden they jumped out to attack him. Bob was frightened. Seen as he was a wimp he tried to escape but then it happened. The boss of them all came out and hit him to the ground. Next thing he knows he is in a cage tied up. Bob try scream, braking the rope, yelling, seeing is any one was there and then he just lied down and stayed put hoping he would be let out. After about 1 hr of just sitting there the big boss came in and started teasing him. Bob asked what his name was and he said “Lang so if you don’t mind i’ll do the questions” in a really mean and nasty kind of voice. When all the questions was over Bob had given him information about anything and every thing. They finally let him go but Lang told “ You better never show your face again now Scram!! ” Bob ran and ran until his legs just stopped. Bob was crying and saying“I just want to go home” .As soon as as he finished his sentence Adam came back. And he offered him a way home. But he also managed how this will change his life. Bob then said “ yes I will give up this is to terrible. As he was walking back to the car Bob was about to get in when something inside him told him not to. Then Bob said to Adam “ do you know what I think your right I should keep going, then he ran off into the darkness to finish what he started.

As he was going through the forest he felt a bit more brave but not enough to stand up to people. As he was going through he heard a fant “help help”. As he kept walking he heard it again but louder “ help help” then he sore it or should I say him. There was a boy surrounded by clone, two different types of clones. Then he looked on his back and saw there names one was Called But Nut and Nut Bill.

Theme: being a hero

 __Wednesday 18 May__

 Characters : main characters Bob, Small parts: Billy ( friend ) lang/lung ( evil dude ) adam ( life changer person ) but-nut and nut-but ( 2 people who cloned them selves now there are hundreds of them), james ( person needs help )

 Start day / go to school / meet friend / picked on by lang / pick up by mysterious person / driven to Auckland / set on joinery / mets bad dudes / wimps out / find person stuck in strange land / faces fear / saves person / big battle / good days at school from then on.

One day Bob woke up like it was a normal day but it turned out to be the weirdest day of his life. Bob was a small boy very shy and very scared. He did his usual routine for getting ready for school. Then Bob said “ another day at school of miserable day at school ”. Off he went on to the bus to school.

 When he got to school he met his one friend Billy came up to him and said hello. Then the troubled started. This guy at school called lung was the biggest bully in the school. Lung cam up to Bob and gave him some much grief how he was so dumb and weak. Then Lung piked Bob and Bill and chucked them in a rubbish bin. They were in there for about an hour or so when some came and took them out the rubbish bin. When the kids sore some one really weird and he said “I am here to change your life”.

<span style="font: normal normal normal 12px/normal Helvetica; letter-spacing: 0px; margin: 0px;"> The boys just stood there freaked out. But the man was only there for Bob. So he took Bob away into his car and just drove off leaving Bill there. In the car Bob kept asking questions but all he said was “ all will be reviled in a mater of time. After about an hour the strange guy said “when you get to the gate tell them that Adam Pinky sent you and they will let you start your journey. So Bob hoped out sacred out of his whits but had enough gut to go to the gate. The person at the gate asked him “ Who sent you ?” and Bob replied to him Adam Pinky sent me. As soon as he finished the gates opened and the person at the gate said “ good luck you have now started your journey”.

<span style="color: #0000ff; font: normal normal normal 12px/normal Helvetica; letter-spacing: 0px; margin: 0px;">Mitchell your first two sentence's are very good it explains how the story starts. You do need to look at some of your spelling and capital letters. (James)

<span style="font: normal normal normal 12px/normal Helvetica; letter-spacing: 0px; margin: 0px;">Theme: being a hero

<span style="font: normal normal normal 12px/normal Helvetica; letter-spacing: 0px; margin: 0px;">__Monday 16 May__

<span style="font: normal normal normal 12px/normal Helvetica; letter-spacing: 0px; margin: 0px;">Characters : main characters Bob, Small parts: Billy ( friend ) lang/lung ( evil dude ) adam ( life changer person ) but-nut and nut-but ( 2 people who cloned them selves now there are hundreds of them), james ( person needs help )

<span style="font: normal normal normal 12px/normal Helvetica; letter-spacing: 0px; margin: 0px;">Start day / go to school / meet friend / picked on by lang / pick up by mysterious person / driven to Auckland / set on joinery / mets bad dudes / wimps out / find person stuck in strange land / faces fear / saves person / big battle / good days at school from then on.

<span style="font: normal normal normal 12px/normal Helvetica; letter-spacing: 0px; margin: 0px;">One day Bob woke up like it was a normal day but it turned out to be the weirdest day of his life. Bob was a small boy very shy and very scared. He did his usual routine for getting ready for school. Then Bob said “ another day at school of miserable day at school ”. Off he went on to the bus to school.